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dumbguy-Q-
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| Subject: Mike's Writings  2007-03-09, 09:04 | |
| This is where I will post any poems or short short stories that come to me. Critique if you wish...
if I can remember, I'll say what kind of poem it is and when I thought of it. | |
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dumbguy-Q-
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-09, 09:14 | |
| A Haiku.
At about 9:00AM while showering March 9, 2007
Tears, to shed is life
Bittersweet poison they are
Tears, to shed is death
Last edited by on 2007-03-09, 19:28; edited 1 time in total | |
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Ying Fa
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Age : 35
Localisation : In your pants
Registration date : 2006-11-22
| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-09, 18:25 | |
| I like it, however, arent Haikus suppsed to be 5,7,5?
Just wondering... | |
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dumbguy-Q-
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-09, 19:13 | |
| - Ying Fa wrote:
- I like it, however, arent Haikus suppsed to be 5,7,5?
Just wondering... you're right, i messed it up and now ive forggoten the actual poem in my head. | |
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dumbguy-Q-
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-09, 19:29 | |
| i fixed it, thank you for the comment | |
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Ying Fa
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-09, 19:43 | |
| I like it even better now. The flow is much better^__________^ | |
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dumbguy-Q-
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-03-23, 11:12 | |
| A Techie Haiku I wrote last night to send into ThinkGeek for a chance at a $50 prize. Every month when their newsletter comes out, they choose the best haiku entry and the winner gets $50!
Woe, I lack Knowledge
To learn would be wonderful
Of Perl, I now read | |
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Ying Fa
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-04-18, 08:58 | |
| i never liked haiku very much.
T.T
Gomen. | |
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dumbguy-Q-
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-04-18, 11:23 | |
| - Ying Fa wrote:
- i never liked haiku very much.
T.T
Gomen. i do, its a style I can accually write. XP | |
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Ying Fa
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| | Subject: Re: Mike's Writings 2007-04-18, 14:33 | |
| They always sound so out of place and choppy to me. | |
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